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My Hat! and Two by Two — Two Poems December 5, 2006

Filed under: Poetry — jojanoski @ 10:13 am

A workshop assignment, a triolet about winter weather. I’ve done two. The first is for fun; the second, more serious.

MY HAT!

Breeze sends my hat sailing through air.
I race behind, sliding on ice.
Wintry weather messes my hair.
Breeze sends my hat sailing through air.
Snow falls come, don’t know what to wear.
No way to be warm and still look nice.
Breeze sends my hat sailing through air.
I race behind, sliding on ice.

TWO BY TWO

Snowflakes streaming two by two
in perfect winter conformation.
Devising ice dances anew
Snowflakes streaming two by two.
Waltzing, swirls, pirouettes, too.
Wintry dance transformation.
Snowflakes streaming two by two
in perfect winter conformation.

Copyright 2006 JO Janoski

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4 Responses to “My Hat! and Two by Two — Two Poems”

  1. Bob Says:

    Somebody enjoys winter a little more than I do, I fear. Still, the rhythmic alliteratory progressions are pleasant to the ear. Nice job…

  2. jojanoski Says:

    Thank you, I think…Geez, you have a good vocabulary. P.S. I do like winter.

  3. Bob Says:

    Ha! Well, I didn’t stop to think that the term might be a little high-flown, but when I read poetry, I like to read it aloud, to see how the words sound when given air. When they blend in such a way to flow, then I think of them as being alliterative. To me, poetry is as much about sound as it is about the words’ meanings. If you ever have the opportunity, listen to your local PBS FM station when Garrison Keillor reads a poem on Writer’s Almanac, and you’ll listen to a master. And, yes… it was intended as a compliment.

  4. Soulless Says:

    The beat reminds me of skipping stones. ^_^ Like Bob, I read poetry aloud (even mine, when writing); I go primarily by way of sound. I remember someone once said (a blogger, too) that poetry is the “sister of song.” ^_^ Here, in the two pieces, the lines remind me of a series of notes ending in a staccato beat.

    I look forward to your creations, Jo, becoming a voracious reader with each time. Cheers.


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